Some things to keep in mind -
From "Unleash the Master Within" - What is Mali's personal connection to this topic? How does he communicate/illustrate his passion?
From "Master the Art of Storytelling" - What is his "story"? What point is communicated by that story? What details does he include to make you believe or at least visualize his story? How does his story appeal to pathos? How does Mali use villains?
From "Have a Conversation" - Now this isn't a conversation, as it appeared originally on Def Jam Poetry, but it doesn't come across as painfully rehearsed. Now, since Mali used a key point in Tip #2 (Master the art of storytelling) by basing this on an actual event, how is he able to delivery this authentically as opposed to being rehearsed so that it comes across as inauthentic?
From "Teach Me Something New" - Outside of showing his audience what it is like dealing with 8th grade girls who are "like" addicts, I don't know that Mali is teaching his audience anything new. Or is he? Perhaps the better question is, what "new" thing does he teach himself as a result of this performance?
Now, apply each of the first four chapters (1. Unleash the Master Within. 2. Master the Art of Storytelling. 3. Have a Conversation. 4. Teach Me Something New) to this TED Talk.
To help you -
* how does Kamen's Talk touch on each chapter?
* what area is Kamen's the strongest in? What area is his weakest in?
* as a speaker/presenter was is Kamen's greatest strength? What could he improve on?
* If you had to assign a score to this TED Talk (1-10, with 10 being the highest score) what would you rate it. Justify this based on how well you feel his talk hits the four categories.
Richard/Ethan/Jace Table:
ReplyDeleteVideo One: The personal connection is he is expressing that he is a teacher. The topic is "Release the Master Within" and Taylor teaches this 8th grade girl that she has more potential than she believes she has.
His main point in this story revolved around this 8th grade. His message to her was that if you stop and think about what your saying then you become more aware of the world around i.e. intelligence, charisma, and potential. Overall his presentation was very connected. This was a personal experience to him and that the story all the more realistic.
Taylor used a lot of gestures, facial expressions, inflections in the tone of his voice, and a pompous presence. He commanded the room and he let everyone know that he was in charge. He also looked natural. It did not appear that he rehearsed this speech many times, even though he probably gave this speech hundreds of times.
Taylor learned how to teach children in better ways to help them become more inspired or free-thinkers. Ultimately, he wants children to follow their passion.
Video Two: Dean works heavily with biomedical engineering. He connects with the audience through his emotions, thoughts, and sympathy to those who have lost their limbs.
Dean talks about a few stories. The first is about two men who lost a total of three arms. One man lost only one, while the other lost both. Second was about a man who only had his left. He, on the other hand, was lucky because he was left-handed. The third story was about a young man who lost all of his limbs and vision in one of he eyes. This story relates to pathos because you can tell it in his tone. He is serious, yet caring. The pace of speech and deep-thoughts clued the audience that he has a passion for helping others improve their lives.
Dean spoke like a conversation. There were no signs of rehearsal. His emotions, facial expressions, and tone over cumbered the fact that he any form of rehearsal before hand.
I learned how far people can go to help others in extraordinary situations. The boundaries of science can be pushed if scientists have the heart to push their emotions to create innovation.
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ReplyDeleteJordan (Jerdan), Claire (Shalaire), Alexis (stay in ur Lane), Sheyenne (Shani), Sam (Sm), and Alyce (AHLEEECE):
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#1. He's a teacher. He's emotionally invested into his students. He communicates his passion bY YELLING. BY SOCIETY. BY LIKES.
#2. He talks about what he teaches, and how its not the same as what's in the traditional classroom. ("I like how he did the "like" thing at the beginning and followed trough until the end."-Jerdan) He changed the classroom rules.
#3. He rehearsed to get down the technicalities but left room for his emotions. He's naturally a public speaker and a storyteller so all he really needed was a basic outline, and he can handle the rest himself.
#4. He's not the only person who feels this way. Through teaching an 8th grader, she taught him a lesson that he could then pass on to the audience.
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#1. He's the reason arms are ever a thing. He basically was in charge of the whole thing with the help of others.
#2. Dean's story was about how he made a bionic arm for veterans that had lost their's in combat, and how despite his initial thoughts of it being impossible, he worked until he made his goal.
#3. He connects with the audience by telling a story. You could just tell he was telling it from the heart. Even though he had a flat voice, you could tell he cared.
#4. ("Dean learned he needed to have a mic so he could drop it at the end."-Shalaire) He didn't need to learn anything from his performance. He learned that even though he's not a dynamic speaker, he can get his point across.
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He used his mastery to teach his eighth graders how to change their minds. He shows his passion and by saying at the end that he will change the world one eighth grader at a time. His heart sings when he helps his eighth graders learn new things. His story is how he got Lily Wilson to change how her mind works. She started out by excessively using the word like, and he changed his classroom into a "like" free zone. She eventually learned to think before she spoke. Since this event was something that actually happened to him he was able to easily re-enact it rather than having to rehearse and memorize it. He learns that you can't teach everyone the same way. He has to customize his teaching so he can connect with each student. When he changed the classroom into a no "like" zone, he only changed one student's way of thinking.
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He was a master at creating those robotic arms, and he told his personal story of how making these arms impacted his life. You could tell this wasn't rehearsed because he made frequent pauses to think about what he was going to say next, and this topic was something he knew very well because it impacted his life. He let all of the people he was helping teach him about what they want in the arms. His strength in the talk was his knowledge of the subject and how he could use his creation to help veterans. His weakness would probably be how monotone he was. He had everyone listening, but he had the same voice through the whole talk. He can improve by adding more emotion and life into his voice to further engage the audience. We would give him like a 7.5/10 because he knew what he was talking about, but he lacked enthusiasm. It was cool how he let the veterans teach him about the arms, instead of him deciding what was best for them.
1. Unleash the Master Within
ReplyDeleteIt's obvious that Dean Kamen is passionate about his work and that despite his skepticism and obstacles, he's been inspired countless times by the people he's gotten to work with and for.
2. Master the Art of Storytelling
Kamen tells both his own personal story and those of others to illustrate the point that "These people deserve everything humanly possible." Kamen goes through a sort of transformation within his own story, starting out as a reluctant engineer and ending as an aggressive advocate for both his work and the people that it benefits. It shows his passion in the clearest way and gives the audience a window into the benefits and obstacles. I think that storytelling is Kamen's greatest strength.
3. Have a Conversation
Although Kamen's speech comes across very casual and passionate, his body language and quietness take away from the meaning in his words. He appears stiff, as if nervous or ashamed of being on the stage, even though his speech gives evidence of mastery and heart. I think that this is his greatest weakness.
4. Teach Me Something New
Dean Kamen's speech addresses a subject that we don't think about often and allows us to look into the reality of the problem. However, the cool part, is that he also offers a solution that's innovative and exciting. Kamen's stories about hopeful amputees and the evolution of his work drive the audience to want to do something in support of his passion. It drives the audience to want to give back, the same way that Kamen has been working to give these veterans what they deserve (or have a right to).
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ReplyDeleteHe emphasized the words that meant the most to him; he did not remain monotone.
He told the story of a girl who use the word “like” too much. He told about how Lily Wilson had a word addiction. She said the word “like” often. He spoke about how he made his classroom a “like-free zone”. She didn’t talk for days. He then spoke about her coming to his office for help on an essay. She wrote an essay about why homosexuals shouldn’t be aloud to adopt children. Everyone seemed to be for that argument, but Lily said that she wanted to change her mind. This sort of story is relatable to people who have ever changed their minds, teachers, and anyone who didn’t agree with societal norms. He also had passion in his story, so it even appeals to those who have never experienced something similar. It allowed people to visualize the story as if they were actually there.
Since it actually happened, he can tell the story as if he were simply reliving it. He didn’t have to formulate the story, just tell it as it happened. He didn’t have to write up a script and write up every detail. He may have had to write the story and revise it, but he didn’t have to come up with the story itself.
He may not be teaching the audience something new, but he is emphasizing the impact that teachers can have on a student.
Video 2:
Instead of almost screaming his story, he told his story as he would if he were speaking to a person. He told the story with a solemn tone.
He told the story about people who have lost appendages, particularly in war. He told about his response to people pitching the idea for a prosthetic arm that is very fine-tuned and weighs less than nine pounds. He told his story from his perspective. He told the story with his thoughts as annotations. He told the story with footnotes. He told the story in a way that made you feel like you were there, thinking and fearing the same things he was.
This did not sound rehearsed because it was a genuine story told by him that he went through. He didn’t have to come up with the story, just how he was going to say it.
He taught the audience about the inspiration for the arm. He taught the audience why he decided to make prosthetic arms. He talked them through the process of building an arm.
Video 1: He had energy when he spoke. He was not boring to listen to at all. You could tell which words had the most personal meaning to him because of how he emphasized those words.
ReplyDeleteHis mastery is demonstrated through how he teaches the 8th graders. Just by listening to him talk you can hear how passionate he is about these 8th graders. The Lily Wison story was pretty entertaining to listen to. I can think of a number of people who use the word "like" too much, and I am sometimes guilty of this, but by changing his environment into a "like free" zone, the results would be pretty neat. The kids would sound far more intelligent if they weren't using "like" every other word. You can tell his story wasn't rehearsed either, he was speaking from the heart. Not all children learn the same way either. Some kids need different instruction than other kids, and Mali knows this and uses it in his classroom.
Video 2: If it weren't for Mr. Kamen, the advanced prosthetic limbs we have today wouldn't be around. HIs emotion and his drive has helped so many people who have lost limbs, mainly veterans.
His story about developing the prosthetic for amputee veterans was pretty cool. How we wanted them to be able to pick up the grape, and also be able to feel it. IT shows how passionate this man was about using his skills and money to help out those who have almost made the ultimate sacrifice for our country.
His speaking ability is his greatest strength. He was not boring to listen to, and you can tell he wasn't just blabbering our memorized words. A very solid speaker and entertaining to listen to.
I would rate this a 8 out of 10. He had a great idea and a great drive and made his idea a reality. He is changing the lives of our heroes who have sacrificed so much, and that is such an amazing accomplishment on his part.
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ReplyDeleteIn both of the videos we have watched by Mali, it is clear that he does rehearse, but does not go overboard.
I really enjoy his speaking style and how he incorporates personal experiences into his poems. This poem, revolving around an 8th grade girl with a 'like' problem, is about being able to change your mind. It is very obvious in his speaking style that he is passionate about his students and his goals for them.
Video 2:
I liked the fact that he had so much knowledge about creating these prosthetic limbs and the science behind it. However, his speaking style was not a good as Mali's. He had a great story, but did not rehearse as much as he should have and had a very monotone voice for the most part.
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ReplyDelete1. Unleash the Master Within
a. Mali is a teacher and begins by telling a story of how he implemented a rule into his classroom. Mali also touches on the reaction of a student and the problems the student encounters. At the very beginning of the video, It almost sounded like he was starting a slam poem. Mali broadcasts his passion and love for his students through his poem and through how he changed one of his students.
2. Have a Conversation
a. Mali first starts out by talking about a rule he implemented into his classroom; you can no longer use the word “like.” After a couple of days, Lilly Willson claims that she now has to think before saying anything (what a concept.) Later on, Lilly asks Mali about her paper on why homosexuals shouldn’t be able to adopt. Soon after, Lilly changes her position but needs to answer the why. Throughout all of this, Mali realizes that in order to change the world, he has to do it one eighth grader at a time. Ultimately, I think this speech was designed to encourage you to think before speaking. Too often people regret saying something because they didn’t think beforehand. Throughout Mali’s poem, he is vivid with his tone of voice and the reactions of Lilly. While doing all of this, he appeals to our emotions through his changing tone of voice and the story that most of us can relate to in some way or another.
3. Have a Conversation
a. Mali clearly had to have rehearsed his poem before performing it in front of an audience. Despite being rehearsed, his passion shined through and made it seem very natural and unscripted. When creating his poem, he undoubtedly changed and edited it in order to make it as authentic as he could possibly make it. No matter how many times something is rehearsed, it will always seem authentic if the performer is truly passionate about what they do. True passions never die.
4.Teach Me Something New
a. Although he may have helped with a possible fear of public speaking, I don’t think he improved himself in that particular department. Towards the end of his speech, he mentions that throughout everything that happened to him, he learned that he was going to change the world one eighth grader at a time. Personally, I don’t think this is as accurate as he thinks. By showing his passion and how he changes others, he is inspiring his audience and changing the world in ways an eighth grader couldn’t fully understand. He’s inspiring other to change the people he can in a meaningful and positive way.
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ReplyDelete1. Kamen was a master at creating the arms and at recognizing people for what they have done. Throughout Kamen’s speech, he masters storytelling by telling stories that pull at the heart strings of the audience and by telling stories that are related to his product/mission. At first, Kamen really wasn’t connecting to me. After a while, Kamen started to loosen up, use comedy, and use his gestures more. Despite having other options for prosthetics, Kamen completely changes the game with his product and his passion for change.
2. Overall, Kamen is strongest in the storytelling and passion department. Although it got boring at times, Kamen’s story connected his passion to his project and showed the audience the impact he has made throughout the years that he has spent on his project. Although public speaking wasn’t his passion, he delivered his thoughts in a way that showed his passion. He did what some considered impossible in a short period of time due to his passion and compassion for those in need. On the other end of the spectrum, Kamen didn’t show us how and when exactly he wanted to accomplish what he claimed to be his goals.
3. As a speaker, Kamen did a good job at adjusting to his audience. At first, he was stiff and seemed like he didn’t care about what was going on. As his speech progressed, he realized what he was doing wrong and eventually brought humor and movement into his speech. On a negative note, when Kamen was speaking, his voice nearly put me to sleep on multiple occasions. Despite not getting enough sleep, I’m having a hard time believing that it was just me faced with this. Despite his obvious passion, his voice was far too flat to get me excited about what he was talking about.
4. Despite all of the great things he has accomplished, Kamen needs to work on projecting his feelings while speaking. I could tell he was passionate by what he said, not by how he said it. Kamen was great at telling stories that were meaningful to both his audience and to his topic. That being said, I would give Kamen a 7/10. After some more practice with public speaking (and maybe a good nights rest,) Kamen will be able to leave more of an impact on his audience.
Video #1- In the two videos I've watched of Mali speaking I'v really enjoyed his speaking style and how he gets his audience engaged into what he is talking about. Mali's speeches are rehearsed but in a way that shows his true passion for what he is talking about. Mali shows what he cares about by putting more emotion behind certain words or phrases.
ReplyDeleteMali shares the story of the girl that used "like" too much. By sharing this story he creates an emotional connection with the audience because he has lived through that experience. By sharing with the audience his idea for a "like-free" zone he is sharing personal experiences and also teaching the audience how to get students to really connect and learn from you. By telling his students that his classroom is a "like-free" zone he made them more conscious of what the were saying which in turn made them better students and better learners.
Video #2- Although Kamen's speaking style is complete opposite of Mali's it doesn't make him any worse or better. Kamen's speaking style is more of a relaxed casual tone rather than a jump down your throat tone. He also creates a personal connection to the audience by sharing his inspirations for changing the way the prosthetic limb works. It depends on the type of person you are whether or not you think Kamen is interesting to listen too. Just as some people might find Mali's approach to his topic overwhelming.
There is no doubt that Kamen is passionate too about his topic. He was genuine about the topic because it is really a hard thing for people to go through. You can tell Kamen puts a lot into what he does by the way he talks. His speech is not rehearsed and you can tell that it is easy for him to talk about it because he is very familiar with the topic. Without Kamen we may not have such an advancement in prosthetics which is why I think listening to Kamen is very interesting.
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ReplyDelete1. Mali is a very involved teacher. He illustrates his passion by giving an example of how he communicates with his students. He tells the audience how he is changing the world; one eighth grader at a time.
2. Mali talks about a student he helped in class one day. He described her as a girl who used the word "like" a lot in order to establish a little humor. By sharing his story about helping this little girl, he illustrates that changing a person's mind is proof that they still have one and that it is a good thing to change directions on your views of things.
3. A person can tell that his presentation has been rehearsed but Mali has just rehearsed it to help give himself a base for his speech. He lets emotions of his push the speech along in the right direction and the base just helps to bring those emotions out.
4. I think that telling the story of eighth grade like addicts just helps the audience to connect with him. By having them connected until the end of his speech where he makes his important statements, it helps get his point across that having a changing mind is a good thing.
7/10 speech
Video #2
1. He is one of the main men in charge of helping to build arms for veterans who have lost their arms.
2. He tells the stories of men who lost their arms way back then and people who lost arms now. He tells how the thought of an arm with fine motor skills came to and their goals of building one.
3. You can tell that this man is very passionate about this speech but he is simply a soft spoken person. When he talks, you can hear the excitement in his voice, but it is more of a contained excitement.
4. The way this man talked, I think it intrigued the audience even more. He seemed so much like a normal human being. He wasn't a perfect speaker like a lot of the people that give the talks. I know thats what made me want to keep listening to him. His speech seemed so real.
8/10 Speech
Mali's personal connection in his presentation were his view on same-sex marriage. He talked about changing the mind of his student who was against it just by telling her to dig into the subject that apparently, she didn't know too much about. Because same-sex marriage is something that creates a lot of controversy today, it was an effective connection that Mali made to interest and touch the audience in a way that would make his message much more memorable.
ReplyDeleteMali did not stumble once in his presentation, and I think it was partly because he was well-rehearsed and partly because he is so passionate about teaching that it was impossible for him to be nervous enough to make a mistake. Every word that he said resonated with me, and made me feel how proud he was of "Like Lily Like Wilson". His techniques and passion helped him to be successful because he was able to captivate the audience as well as get his message across effectively.
Mali used humor and depicted real conversations that took place in his classroom. He mocked how young people tend to fill their sentences with filler words such as 'like' or 'um'. Although his topic was a serious one, the added humor made it seem slightly more laid back and easy to follow. He didn't slam the audience with his views on same-sex marriage; instead he eased them into it with light conversation and intended assumptions.
Although same-sex marriage isn't a new topic, and ideas on how to create equality have already been discussed, he did introduce an idea that I'm sure most people hadn't considered. Beliefs originate from what we are taught when we are young, and I know that the mind of a young person is much more open to consideration than the mind of an adult who has already marinated in their own beliefs for years without question. He realizes that if he is to make a difference in acceptance and peace, he has to start with the young minds that will shape the world in the future, and not focus on minds that will probably never change.
I would rate this TED Talk an 8, only because I didn't understand what he was trying to say until I watched it for a second time. He talked kind of fast, and his points were more implied than they were spoken straight forward. However, it is a very effective TED Talk with a great idea. The speaker had a great strategy when delivering his views on a very controversial topic. He started out very lighthearted, and eased the audience into considering his views on same-sex marriage. He was well rehearsed and easy to understand, even though his views were never said out loud. I think this was a very effective strategy because it forces the audience to consider what he says on a whole new level, and that could force them to consider their own beliefs on the subject and inspire them to make a change as Mali did.
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ReplyDeleteMali is a junior high teacher who teaches and clearly has a passion for it. He conveys his passion for his topics using a certain speaking style; he isn't necessarily yelling at his audience but he keeps them at the edge of their seats, holding onto every single one of his words. Mali uses his passion and experience to paint us a picture of one of his students, and every sentence just blows my mind. He really kept me entertained, and even though he clearly rehearsed, he didn't go over the top with his story. Mali doesn't necessarily teach his audience anything new but opens up our eyes (or at least mine) to the world of teaching, because I hadn't thought about anything that he'd talked about.
There was just something about his poem that really struck a chord with me, maybe its the fact that I want to be a teacher and it opened up my mind to new ideas.
Video Two:
ReplyDeleteKamen's strongest area us his knowledge of the given topic. He's extremely bright and he truly knows what the heck he's talking about. His weakest area is his presentation style. In all honesty, he's boring as hell. To me, if he taught at LHS and I had him for a teacher, I'd fall asleep in his class. He has all the info, just not the best presentation style.To improve his talk, he could maybe add more emotion to his presentation. He must be passionate about it, but I guess thats not enough in his case. If I were to rate this TED talk, I would give it an 8. He covered a majority of the chapters' main point, but his voice was so monotone, it made it seem as if he didn't have the passion for bionic arms and prosthetics, which he does, clearly.