1. Does it come across as too "rehearsed"?
2. How does Mali communicate his emotion?
3. Does all of the practice he poured into this presentation pay off?
4. Does he "sell" you on his idea?
5. Are his examples effective?
6. What is his strongest area? (emotion, novelty, or being memorable)?
Do the same for the second talk embedded as well. Is passion everything?
1. What is his biggest mistake?
2. He is clearly passionate, but why isn't passion enough?
3. What could he have done better?
4. Are his examples effective?
5. Does he "sell" you on his idea?
6. What is his strongest area? (emotion, lovely, or being memorable)?
Then leave two pieces of feedback to your peers.
Thanks
First video: This guy definitely shows emotion above all other things. He manages to hype up his audience to a point where they are as passionate about this topic as he is. He inserted a story that most people could relate to, and reeled everyone in. By the end of the video, his audience is wholeheartedly on his side of the topic.
ReplyDeleteSecond video: Emotion is also a strong suit in this guy's speech, however he doesn't execute it as well. He is constantly riled up, so the audience never knows when to rile up with him. Also, he never shares any anecdotes that the audience can relate to, so he never makes a clear connection. At the end of the speech, everyone who has listened is confused and doesn't know whether they want to support him or not. He's emotional, and definitely memorable, but he needs to work on the novelty of his speech.
Sam,
DeleteI completely agree that the guy in the second video brought emotion to the table. Although he clearly cares about his work, I don't think his execution was the best for what he was trying to achieve. For example, if the situation was more casual, the amount of emotion he displayed may have been a better fit.
I agree with you that the guy in speech two ins constantly rilled up. He never really gives it a break. He was so rilled up the whole time he messed up several of his quotes and had to repeat them "so I have clarity tonight"
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ReplyDeleteTaylor Mali’s poem was obviously rehearsed but doesn’t seem fake and generic. Mali likely performed this and revised it many times before perfecting it, a common practice among performers. His feeling are real even if they were practiced before. This type of poem is a great example of a slam poem. Mali gets his ideas across in an “angry” tone, but if you were to hear this poem in a lighter tone, would it be as memorable? His practice certainly paid off. No matter how many times you do something, you won’t burn out if you’re passionate about it. It’s hard to imagine Mali ever burning out with this poem and with his teaching due to the unscripted emotion he pours into his work. As a future teacher, Mali doesn’t “sell” me his occupation, he strengthens my desire to bring my passion and ideas to wherever I end up. Throughout the speech, his examples strike me. “Why won’t I let you go to the bathroom? Because you’re bored and you don’t really have to go.” Although we all have needs, he understands his students and what they’re really thinking. He pushes them to do great things and doesn’t settle for anything that isn’t their all. He brings emotion to the table and undoubtedly brings that to his work place. He seemingly instills these traits in his students without even saying much (or anything) at all. After hearing Mali’s speech, it’s going to be incredibly hard to forget. He was relatable, influential, and memorable in a crowded array of slam poems.
Video Two:
Like Donald Trump, there is something incredibly laughable about this guy. Although I’m sure he practiced, he seemed unprepared and very nervous. After realizing how bad he had started, it seems like his strategy was to be memorable through fear and through being remarkably unprofessional. Although I can’t deny that he has passion, his delivery was way off for what he was trying to accomplish. He seemed angry for no apparent reason during his speech. If he gets this angry during his speech, how is he going to react when faced with real life problems? His “outburst” reminded me even more of Donald Trump. Under the circumstances, his messages and delivery were inappropriate. His credentials were appropriate for the job he was seeking, but he offered too much information on himself and not enough on what precisely he wanted to accomplish. If he were to calm his movement and lower his voice, he probably would have delivered a more promising speech. Although he seems very motivated to change things, he is way too into the idea of changing things immediately instead of gradually working his way there. As we all know, politics and rapid change are worst enemies. Throughout his speech, I was never entirely sure where he was going with his ideas and he seemed to lack a solid plan for what he wanted to do. Despite the contents of his speech not being memorable, his delivery and actions were undeniably memorable. For some reason, this guy reminds me of an insanely passionate coach.
I agree with you with regard to the first video, that even though he was rehearsed, his emotion was still genuine. I view all his preparation as validation for how much he cares for his students and about the importance of his career. He obviously wanted to be successful, so he took every step necessary in order to achieve that goal. And it payed off.
DeleteFirst Video: This guy was awesome. He had emotion and passion, and it was completely captivating. As a speaker, to me it didn't seem completely rehearsed. He probably practiced what he wanted to say a couple of times to get his point across, but his humor and energy seemed way too authentic to be 100% scripted. Honestly, it kind of sounded like a slam poem. It was like a snowball effect. He just built up and up and up and the momentum was kicked up a notch, and I felt like my blood pressure was going up just watching it. He comes across as angry almost, but it just seemed passionate to me. I get loud and yell when I get hyped too. He's relatable and honest and he had me hooked until the end. *mic drop*
ReplyDeleteSecond video: This guy is clearly passionate, but the situation doesn't apply to all of his energy. I appreciate the enthusiasm, don't get me wrong, but he just doesn't seem like the best public speaker haha (I say haha because I'm listening to the video as I type and he'S SCREAMING AND I DON'T UNDERSTAND WHY) He obviously has all of the qualifications, but he's going about it all wrong. Stop yelling sir... I get your point. He wants to make a change in his community, and I say we let him. My advice to him is to take a public speaking class, maybe be a little more scripted so you don't lose your head and start yelling at your audience. His emotion is there, it's scary, but it;s there. I think this video is more memorable though. And the pacing ???? Why does he gotta walk around his podium like that? It's too much, I can't focus on anything else. I'd vote for this guy just because I think he's funny.
Sheyenne,
DeleteI completely agree that the first "speech" was more passionate than it was "angry." When comparing the two videos, the distinction between passion and anger is visible. Although they may have sounded alike in regards to their tone, they were worlds apart in their delivery and effectiveness.
I agree with you on the second speech. His pacing was very distracting and he kept looking at his notes. And the screaming is slightly unnecessary in politics.
DeleteI completely agree that the second guy needs to stop screaming. I'm not even sure I would go so far as to say he's passionate. Of course he appears to be passionate, but it seems to me like he googled how to be successful when delivering a speech and passion popped up a couple of times so he decided that in order to be passionate, he needs to say everything louder. I disagree with you when you say that he's probably qualified for whatever position he was campaigning for. I can't recall a shred of information from his speech that stated his views or opinions as a candidate, and that kind of information in crucial when deciding on who to vote for. Maybe if I listened to it a couple more times I would be able to decipher a point, but the point of a speech is to get your point across the first time.
DeleteI agree that the second video is a little scary. What would happen if this guy was voted for the position he was trying to attain? I don't even know what he was trying to accomplish because he was hard to understand with all the yelling. He comes across as irrational. Passionate, but irrational.
DeleteSheyenne,
DeleteI am so glad you brought up the pacing! It captured all of my attention. I feel like he did it due to nerves or lack of preparation.
First Video:
ReplyDeleteThis guy nailed it. He had the audience engaged, including me even though it is just a video. You could clearly tell he is passionate about teaching and he does not do it for the money he does it for all the other reasons he listed. It does not come across as too rehearsed, and if it was rehearsed a lot I could not tell. However much he did practice it paid off. I could feel his passion for teaching as he was up there preaching about it and it almost made me want to become a teacher. I would for sure listen to this guy if I had a chance.
Video 2:
Okay, this guy was passionate yes, but he did not pull it off. He clearly did not practice his speech since while pacing on stage he kept going back to look at his notes and multiple times screwed up the wording. I don't think his speech was supposed to be a comedy but I was laughing at him during almost the whole thing. I don't think I would vote for him just because of how he performed this speech, he didn't sell himself well enough. I feel as though politics is supposed to be formal and professional and quiet. Then you see this guy yelling to the point of his voice cracking. I think this speech will be memorable but not in the way he wants it to be. He will be remembered as the man who gave the worst speech ever.
I agree with you Kira, there is passion in both of these speeches but one was executed better. The first video engaged the audience and had them rooting for him, but the second video came across as funny because of the amount of pacing, screwing up, and yelling he had.
DeleteKira,
DeleteI agree with you on the fact that I would not vote for him as well. Speaking of the worst speech ever, he is actually famous online now because of his speech. He is actually the laughing stock of the area of politics!
First video: there's nothing wrong with being rehearsed. It sure beats the alternative. Because he was so thorough and prepared, he was able to make the audience laugh, cry, and applaud. While getting his point across. All in 3 minutes and 8 seconds.
ReplyDeleteWhat really threw me off and got my attention was how he would act or sound one way and then take it in a completely different direction. He would tell his stories in such detail and with such emotion, yet it would be structured enough to be easily understood.
The key to Mali's success, in my opinion, was that for every technique he used, he used them at the appropriate times. He started off lighthearted to involve the audience, and then he told relatable stories to make them care. He didn't assault the audience with his opinions; he eased it into them.
Second video: the only information and I got out of this guy's speech was that he represented the Republican Party. He was very passionate, but I'm not sure he even knew what he was passionate about. His biggest mistake, in my opinion, was that he believed the louder you yell, the better your point will get across. Even though I did find his speech extremely entertaining, if I had attended that speech and truly cared about the debate, I would probably be offended at how unprofessional and unprepared this guy was.
ReplyDeleteFirst video: it's obvious throughout the whole video how passionate this guy is about what he's speaking about. I don't think he came across as too rehearsed. It's better to be over rehearsed rather than not rehearsed enough. He communicates through many emotions that he shares with the audience. His passion shows to everyone, the audience and anyone who watches the video. The audience is engaged, and he's relatable to everyone who has a career that isn't seen by most as great as it really is. He performed a very memorable poem that I will remember for a long time.
ReplyDeleteSecond video: This video is a mess. I feel secondhand embarrassment for him. Why does he keep yelling at random times? He changes his tone at random aspects of the speech. He is so unprepared, he has to read almost every word off of his notes. He may be passionate about what he's talking about, but it isn't shown that he's given enough time into practicing his speech that seems to be pretty important to him. If I was sitting in that room watching him, I would not vote for him and quite frankly I'd probably be terrified of him. This is a memorable video, but not a good kind of memorable.
First Video:
ReplyDeleteI really appreciate that he knew what he was doing, unlike the guy in the 2nd video. He communicates his emotions well through varying volume and emphasis. If he hadn't practiced, he would not have been able to communicate his emotions well. It was really interesting in how he would sound very concerned, but state super positive things. It made me stop and think about how teachers really make a difference bigger than we can see.
Second Video:
This may be the worst speech I have heard from someone over the age of 16. Firstly, his emotions were not placed where they should be. He started out at a fine volume, but about 10 seconds into the speech his volume increased and stayed there for the entirety. Secondly, he did not rehearse nearly enough. Yes, he wrote out some notes for himself, but he did not know many key points off the top of his head. He had to keep going back to the podium to check himself. He didn't even know his 'most favorite quote in the history of spoken word' off the top of his head. Overall, he did not communicate or present his ideas well.